| Author | Message | ||
| Lisa
Advanced Member Username: lisa_m Post Number: 191 Registered: 11-2003 |
Between an Axed Moon & a Blood Wing Cold bites into my skin, even in dreams there can be this haunting where exhalation becomes difficult under weight of shadow, and the moths drift, talc on silk. They are a quiet drowning, the way they melt into snow. My grey gloves are the ravens of this world, shadow play over the bracelet of the lake. My breath that fogs its surface is arsenic white with stars that harden, then cave in. I am only beginning to understand my role here, and the nightjars, my companions, part of the darkening that clothes me, and there's such silence in their mouths. (Message edited by lisa_m on November 27, 2005) | ||
| Karen L Monahan
Valued Member Username: klhmonahan Post Number: 195 Registered: 08-2004 |
very beautifully sad, lisa. thanks. (((smile))) Karen | ||
| Kathy Paupore
Senior Member Username: kathy Post Number: 2726 Registered: 12-2003 |
Lisa, deeply moving, lovely images. Love the title.  K | ||
| Teresa White
Intermediate Member Username: teresa_white Post Number: 310 Registered: 01-2005 |
Lisa, Good use of metaphor throughout. Simply lovely. Enjoyed very much, Teresa | ||
| Zephyr
Senior Member Username: zephyr Post Number: 3260 Registered: 07-2003 |
Deserving of several reads Lisa, lovely images,which I thoroughly enjoyed. I believe nightjar is one word not two? | ||
| Lisa
Advanced Member Username: lisa_m Post Number: 203 Registered: 11-2003 |
Karen, thanks so much. Kathy, thanks for stopping by & leaving me such a generous comment. Yes, l'm starting to get creative with my titles, lol, and they're just getting longer and longer. Teresa, l really am so pleased that you enjoyed it. Zephyr, thanks for sorting the nightjar thing out for me, l'd never have realised. Also thanks for leaving me a lovely comment. | ||
| Michael MV
Senior Member Username: michaelv Post Number: 1070 Registered: 11-2003 |
Lovely couplets, esp liked 3, 5, 6 & 7 Maybe GB will check in on this one. I think it's one that he would particularly like/admire. Michael (MV) | ||
| LJ Cohen
Moderator Username: ljc Post Number: 3474 Registered: 07-2002 |
Lisa--so good to see your work here on Wild again. This is lovely writing. Spare like the cold itself. This section, my favorite, probably because your line breaks take me in such unexpected directions: They are a quiet drowning, the way they melt into snow. My grey gloves are the ravens of this world, shadow play over the bracelet of the lake. Well written. best, ljc http://ljcbluemuse.blogspot.com/ | ||
| Lisa
Advanced Member Username: lisa_m Post Number: 205 Registered: 11-2003 |
Hi Michael, thanks for stoping by, very pleased that you liked. Hi Lisa, can't tell you how wonderful it is to be back at Wild. Thank you so much for leaving me such a lovely comment. I'm very pleased to know that my line breaks are working for you, as its always been a problem for me. |
